Thursday Read Write Poem

datePosted on 15:12, September 24th, 2009 by EKSwitaj

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Fujisan

I always said I climbed alone
that mountain, that perfect composite
cone    I said
I started at the shrine, the bottom

seems logical enough
but said I didn’t take the bus
halfway up

and I didn’t
but I wasn’t

alone

the woman who ran the abandoned
tea house and pointed my way
was my first clue

foxes & wings & formless
followed me
from Fuji Sengen Jinja
where I threw a coin & clapped a bell

over treeline
they lifted boulders
lifted feet
and finally lifted clouds

so I could cheer the sun to rise
a hundred thousand lives

Fuji Sunrise 12

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18 Responses to “Thursday Read Write Poem”

  1. gautami tripathy on September 24th, 2009 at 5:41 pm

    Your poems take me another plane.

    tale of two toes

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    • EKSwitaj on September 25th, 2009 at 11:23 am

      Thank you.

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  2. Paul Oakley on September 24th, 2009 at 7:13 pm

    This is no lie! I especially love these lines:

    over treeline
    they lifted boulders
    lifted feet
    and finally lifted clouds

    _____

    Paul Oakley
    Blogging his ReadWritePoem poems at
    Inner Light, Radiant Life
    Paul Oakley’s last blog ..On one foot, or the other…

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    • EKSwitaj on September 25th, 2009 at 11:25 am

      The way I looked at it was that if the statements in the poem weren’t a lie then what “I always said” had to be.

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  3. irene on September 25th, 2009 at 1:05 am

    Spiritually uplifting and written in a sparse style that fits the context.
    irene’s last blog ..an elephant in the closet

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    • EKSwitaj on September 25th, 2009 at 11:27 am

      I’m glad you found it uplifting. :-)

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  4. David Moolten on September 25th, 2009 at 2:32 am

    Very spiritual and transcendent piece. If you are inventing here, it is only in the physical sense, not the inner one.
    David Moolten’s last blog ..‘Cuda

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    • EKSwitaj on September 25th, 2009 at 11:28 am

      I like the way you put that. Thank you.

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  5. Nathan on September 26th, 2009 at 1:04 am

    This is really beautiful. The photo is lovely too.
    Nathan’s last blog ..Test

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    • EKSwitaj on September 26th, 2009 at 1:26 pm

      Thank you!

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  6. wayne on September 26th, 2009 at 4:50 am

    living in the rocky Mountains I certainly can relate…spirituality of the mountains..indeed UP..lifting..i enjoyed this and thanks for sharing

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    • EKSwitaj on September 26th, 2009 at 1:27 pm

      thanks :-)

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  7. Tumblewords on September 26th, 2009 at 5:47 am

    finely tuned journey…very nice
    Tumblewords’s last blog ..Tanka for Totally Optional Prompts

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    • EKSwitaj on September 26th, 2009 at 1:27 pm

      Thanks!

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  8. Deb on September 26th, 2009 at 6:32 am

    The confession of ‘I am not alone’ is beautiful, especially when described on so many nuanced levels.
    Deb’s last blog ..poems don’t have an expiration date around here

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    • EKSwitaj on September 26th, 2009 at 1:30 pm

      Thank you! :-)

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  9. Therese Broderick on September 28th, 2009 at 9:50 pm

    I like how the poem starts with a discussion of “alone” and ends with a vision of 100,000 lives. I like the word “alone” alone on its own line. You took great care with your line breaks, indentations, and spacing.
    Therese Broderick’s last blog ..ReadWritePoem #93

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    • EKSwitaj on September 29th, 2009 at 10:27 am

      Thank you. The temporary bond that formed among people climbing the mountain (and there are a lot in the summer) was one of the many interesting aspects of the climb. Though when I wrote about those many lives I was actually thinking more of reincarnation than of present living beings, I think this way of looking at it is a happy accident!

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