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Elizabeth Kate Switaj
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Posted on 15:57, October 1st, 2009 by 
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pierced pins into my knees made me think of Oedipus, whose feet were pinned together as a baby to ensure his death when exposed. Here it’s a corrective. But your emphasis in the repetition of the word correctly suggests that “correction” was not so life-giving after all. Very effective use of repetition.
Knowing the Other before being trapped on the axle, the pin that replaces arms (and heart) but being unable to remember is so evocative, so strong!
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Paul Oakley’s last blog ..Paradise Lost
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Thank you. I honestly hadn’t thought of Oedipus in writing this, but now that you mention it, I definitely see the echo.
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I really like the use of the word correctly, it has such an ominously impersonal and perfectionistic tone, like that one associates with machines, or people who submit utterly to a higher authority and become pawns of that authority. The mutilated body of the nonetheless “upbeat” speaker is a subtle testament as well.
David Moolten’s last blog ..Foosball
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Thank you.
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The echo of ‘correctly’ is creepy and perfectionistic giving this an edgy voice.
irene’s last blog ..misses and scores, a tally
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Thanks.
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you have said lots….enjoyed this very much…thanks for sharing
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Thank you!
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What a great title.
Very unusual take.
let the red bleed
gautami tripathy’s last blog ..holding on my breath
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thanks
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The phrase, “Lies, Lies, All Lies” rattled through my mind each time you placed ‘correctly’ in your poem.
Well done…
Mark’s last blog ..get your poem on #94
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Yes, exactly.
Thank you.
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