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Thursday Read Write Poem

Posted on 14:05, December 31st, 2009 by EKSwitaj

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Grace

sleeping on her signature she became a beam
fallen on the eighteenth floor       a mote
   among motes that rust & threaten toes
     of explorers, hips and hearts of dreamers
sleeping on the grey-rot boards
                          she became a splinter
sect)  broken at knees & neck
        to curl from the tweezers

           and when the boots & gloves went home
or to tetanus prevention waiting rooms)

            she saw the light rise & set
           and golden all its angles

         not as a flare in a full glass eye
zoom or wide)
not as a second to capture, print   or pixel
but on & on & onto night

written in response to read write prompt #107: lighting the way

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10 Responses to “Thursday Read Write Poem”

Jerry on December 31st, 2009 at 5:18 pm

This is my first time reading your work, Elizabeth. I don’t know what your other writing is like, but this one suggests a daringly orignal poetic mind. You’ve given this character, if indeed it is just one person, a wealth of color and description! I’m sure it could be read and understood in various ways, but I saw a woman in a hospital bed on the brink of entering eternity.
Jerry’s last blog ..On the Eve of a New Heart

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Paul Oakley on December 31st, 2009 at 6:23 pm

Beautiful, Elizabeth!

Motes and rust and grey rot and splinters and tetanus prevention and glass eyes… all molded powerfully into an image of grace. Wonderful!

she saw the light rise & set
and golden all its angles
… on & on & onto night

Impressive!

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Tumblewords on December 31st, 2009 at 10:48 pm

Expressive and impressive. It’s quite a magical piece.

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angie on December 31st, 2009 at 10:51 pm

wonderful images and I enjoy the way one phrase floats into the next — especially splinter/sect and eye/zoom.

and I love that you saw a woman in the photo.

happy new year!
angie’s last blog ..haiga :: bird tracks

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Linda Fraser on January 1st, 2010 at 2:01 am

I enjoyed reading this expressive insight into moments of a life, maybe about to end or begin; it sparkles! Thank you for sharing this. I hope the coming year has many golden angles of light and peace, but most of all, love!
Linda Fraser’s last blog ..READ, WRITE, PROMPT: # 107 The Third Window, The Third Eye

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Cynthia Short on January 1st, 2010 at 9:02 pm

So many lovely thoughts strung together to form a beautiful piece.

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Erin on January 2nd, 2010 at 1:24 am

This is my first visit. I will definitely be back for more!
Erin’s last blog ..Illumination

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Barbara on January 2nd, 2010 at 7:02 pm

And a bright new year to you, too
I like the “golden all its angles” and the not-photo aspects -zoom -wide -pixel etc

those open parenteses have an interesting effect
Barbara’s last blog ..January 2: Yellow Walls

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wayne on January 2nd, 2010 at 10:49 pm

nicely done Elizabeth…anything “rust” is good….I love rust….cheers

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Francis Scudellari on January 5th, 2010 at 7:28 am

I love how you play with the multiple meanings of words the words in this piece, refracted like a beam of light. And what a great last line.
Francis Scudellari’s last blog ..Crackling

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