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Thursday Read Write Poem

Posted on 19:49, January 14th, 2010 by EKSwitaj

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Breaking the Myth

she spit a fertile froth at Hercules
and watched it drip to his thigh

she thought it was a waste of beer
and regretted once he left

she hadn't shouldered stones
to the chamber where she let him

question her brunts
& sunder her drawings

it would have been so simple
to throw

               & then he'd never leave
head tilted more elite
than the sun 

                     she was no enthusiast
for violence
                      but couldn't be undone

written in response to read write prompt 109: beg, borrow, steal

NB: Last week’s ur-text was Finnegans Wake.

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4 Responses to “Thursday Read Write Poem”

Francis Scudellari on January 14th, 2010 at 7:59 pm

A seamless use of the words, and a great little vignette. I love the tone and the lines “head tilted more elite / than the sun”
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David Moolten on January 14th, 2010 at 10:21 pm

Very effective, ironic take on the myth of Hercules, and classical myth in general. I really like the squalid particulars, the beer, the drawings, the use of the words, especially, “enthusiast.”
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Tumblewords on January 17th, 2010 at 4:00 am

Smooth as silk, sharp as sin. Wonderful!
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Joseph Harker on January 17th, 2010 at 9:27 pm

Nifty story, starts off with a kinetic bang and then drips into regret… excellent use of the words!
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